The charts below show the number of Japanese tourists travelling abroad between 1985 and 1995 and Australia's share of the Japanese tourist market. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the number of Japanese tourists travelling abroad between 1985 and 1995 and Australia's share of the Japanese tourist market. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The charts below show the number of Japanese tourists travelling abroad between 1985 and 1995 and Australia's share of the Japanese tourist market. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates the number of
Japanese
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tourists
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who travelled abroad between 1985 and 1995,
while
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the line graph shows the percentage of those who visited Australia during the same period.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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overseas travel by
Japanese
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tourists
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increased significantly over the 10-year span.
Similarly
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, the proportion of
Japanese
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tourists
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visiting Australia
also
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rose,
although
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there were some fluctuations. Looking at the bar chart in more detail, the number of
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tourists
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going abroad started at around 5
million
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in 1985.
This
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figure rose sharply, reaching approximately 12
million
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by 1990.
Although
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there was a slight dip to 11
million
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in 1991, the upward trend continued, with the number climbing steadily to just under 15
million
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by 1995. Turning to the line graph, the proportion of
Japanese
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tourists
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visiting Australia began at 2% in 1985.
This
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figure saw a significant rise, peaking at 5% in 1989. In 1990, there was a slight decline to around 4.2%, followed by a steady increase to 6.2% in 1994.
However
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, the percentage dropped slightly to 6% in the final year.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "although".
Vocabulary: Replace the words japanese, tourists, million with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • tourism industry
  • market share
  • travelling abroad
  • fluctuations
  • steady increase
  • peak
  • moderate growth
  • correlation
  • notable surge
  • steady growth
  • levels off
  • slight decline
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