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The maps below show a bookstore in 2000 and now. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and makes comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show a bookstore in 2000 and now. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and makes comparisons where relevant.
The map illustrates the layout of a bookstore in 2000 compared to the present.
Overall
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, it can clearly be seen that several new facilities have been added to the bookstore,
while
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 some areas have been relocated, reduced, or removed. In 2000, the
fiction
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section
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 occupied the largest space, almost four times bigger than it does now. The non-
fiction
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 area was located opposite the
fiction
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section
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 in the right corner. The travel and new books
sections
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 were located straight ahead of the entrance, and the service desk was situated in the corner to the right of the entrance.
Additionally
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, the hobbies, cookery, and art
sections
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 were arranged between the
fiction
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 and non-
fiction
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 areas. Currently, the new books, service desk, and travel
sections
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 remain unchanged.
However
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, the
fiction
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 area has become smaller. The art and cookery
sections
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 have been shifted to the top of the bookstore near the
fiction
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section
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.
Moreover
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, a cafe has been constructed where the non-
fiction
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section
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 used to be,
while
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 the non-
fiction
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 area has shifted to the right of the
fiction
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section
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.
Although
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 the hobbies
section
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 has been demolished, a table with four chairs now occupies that space.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words fiction, section, sections with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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