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Some people think students should learn how to cook at school. Others believe it is a waste of time. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Nowadays, some people believe that students should learn how to cook at school,
while
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 others think it is a waste of time. In
this
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 essay, I will discuss both views and give my own opinion. On the one hand, cooking is an important life skill. Not everyone can afford to eat out or buy ready-made food.
In addition
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, fast food is unhealthy, and eating it too often can cause health problems. If students learn how to cook, they can take care of themselves, especially if they live alone in student housing. Even if they can buy ingredients, they may not know how to prepare meals without proper training.
On the other hand
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, some people argue that school time should be used to develop more important skills,
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 as learning languages or improving computer skills. They believe that cooking can be learned at home, and schools should focus on academic subjects
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. In conclusion, I strongly agree that students should learn cooking at school. It is not a waste of time, but rather a valuable skill that can help them in their future lives.

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Try to include more specific examples to support your points.
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Make sure each paragraph connects clearly to the next.
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Clarify your ideas more to enhance understanding.
Coherence and Cohesion
Good structure with an introduction and conclusion.
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You express a clear opinion in your conclusion.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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