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The graph below shows the average hose prices in three countries between the years 1997 and 2014.

The graph below shows the average hose prices in three countries between the years 1997 and 2014.
The chart illustrates the changes in average
house
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prices
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 in Countries A,
B
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, and C between 1997 and 2014.
Overall
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, all three countries started at a similar price level in 1997.
However
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,
while
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house
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prices
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 in Countries A and
B
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 increased significantly over the years, the
prices
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 in
Country
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 C fluctuated slightly and showed a declining trend towards the end of the period. In
Country
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 A,
house
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prices
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 rose gradually from 1997, reaching approximately $510,000 by 2003. The
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 remained steady between 2005 and 2008, and
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 saw a dramatic increase in 2008, hitting $750,000.
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B
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also
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 experienced moderate growth in
house
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prices
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, rising to around $260,000 by 2003. Similar to
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 A,
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 in
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B
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 stayed stable until 2008, after which they surged to about $750,000, matching
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 A's
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.
In contrast
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,
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 C followed a different pattern. Its
house
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prices
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 grew slowly until 2007,
then
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 declined slightly. By the end of 2007, there was a small rise to $250,000. From 2009 to 2013, the
prices
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 remained stable, but in 2014, they started to decrease again.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words house, prices, b, country with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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