The table and charts below give information on the police bugjet for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money come from and the charts show how it was distributed.

The table and charts below give information on the police bugjet for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money come from and the charts show how it was distributed.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The table and charts below give information on the police bugjet for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money come from and the charts show how it was distributed.
The chart depicts the data on the ratio of police spending in Technology, Salaries and buildings and transport from 2017 to 2018 in one place of United Kingdom (UK).
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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the tax collection between 2017 and 2018 has not
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apply
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spiked
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moreover
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; moreover
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, the dominant spending of tax is delivered into buildings and transport.
To begin
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with, the National Government in 2017 collected 175.5
million
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dollars
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in taxes , but it clearly illustrates that in 2018 it slightly rose
with
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by
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just .3million
dollars
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.
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, at the same time, local taxes in 2017 had a 91.2
million
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dollar but they soared an around 10
million
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dollars
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within a year.
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, Other sources like grants
,
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apply
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had a very gradual climb of .5
million
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dollars
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and stood at 38.5
million
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dollars
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.
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, it shows that in 2018 the spending on technology surged by 6% and at the same
time
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time,
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the percentage reduced with salaries reduced by 6% in 2018 respectively.
Therefore
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, the building and transport remain the same as in 2017.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in addition".
Vocabulary: Replace the words million, dollars with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "reduced" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • budget
  • police
  • area
  • money
  • come from
  • charts
  • distributed
  • increase
  • government
  • grants
  • local taxes
  • community
  • invested
  • safety
  • security
  • allocation
  • operational costs
  • salaries
  • vehicle maintenance
  • technology
  • training
  • strategy
  • focus
  • modernizing
  • force
  • enhance
  • efficiency
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