the graph below shows the total of births and deaths in european country from 1950 to 2050

the graph below shows the total of births and deaths in european country from 1950 to 2050
IELTS Writing Task Chart for the graph below shows the total of births and deaths in european country from 1950 to 2050
The line graph illustrates information about the number of
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births and
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deaths in European countries between 1950 and 2050.
Overall
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it is clear that
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of death remained almost stable,
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the
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of
birth
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increased and decreased. In 1950 to 1970, the
Birth
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rate
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increased from 900000 to 1100000,
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remained stable between 1950 and 2030.
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1970,
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the
rate
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birth
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was decreased by 500000
people
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and became 600000 in 1990,
then
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started to increased by 200000
people
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from 1990 to 2010 and became 800000
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, after that, between 2010 and 2030, the
rate
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of
birth
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became remained stable, and the total of
people
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were 800000, and from 2030 to 2050, the
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of
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will be increase by 200000 and the
people
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will be 1000000 in the future, and the
rate
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of death from 2030 to 2050 will be remain stable.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words people, rate, birth with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 4 times.
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