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Band 2.5

Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondarySome school. What extent do you agree or disagree?

Many experts think that it is appropriate for
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juveniles
 to start understanding a foreign language at primary school
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 of
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 school. I consider it a positive trend, and
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points
 will be discussed in the upcoming paragraphs. To commence with the constructive development, foreign language at
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age
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more effect. To elaborate
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 , milestone
childrens
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children
 have much capacity to understand unique words and language. To cite an example, in 2010 survey
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conducted by
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And
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 Welfare Society
, show
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childrens
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children
 of ge 12-18 years have learnt faster than adults. The percentile was 78% out of 100.
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, earlier
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 will
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 them out.
Futher strenghthening
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childs
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 mind
was
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 in
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 stage will help them to quickly learn new things. To explicate it,
age
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childs
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 mind
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 more and more, which helps in gathering more information at a time. To epitome,
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 was published in
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 newspaper The Hindustan Times that younger
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age childs
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children
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strenghting
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strengthening
 and storing power than
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 ones. The evidence proves, easy and fasten way to grasp it quickly. In
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conclusion
, not only
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this will
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helps
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 out if we
started
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 it earlier
but
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also
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fasten
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the
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 memory
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.

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language
Make sure to use correct grammar and spelling throughout your essay. For example, 'juvenile' is the correct spelling, and 'child's' instead of 'childs.'
content
Add a few more examples to support your arguments. This can help strengthen your points.
cohesion
Try to use clearer connecting words between your ideas to improve the flow of your essay.
strength
You have a clear opinion that starting to learn a foreign language early is good.
strength
The essay has a structure with an introduction, body, and conclusion, which is important for coherence.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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