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You recently attended a meeting at a hotel. When you returned home, you found you had left some important papers at the hotel. Write a letter to the manager of the hotel. In your letter •Say where you think you left the papers •Explain why they are so important •Tell the manager what you want him /her to do

Dear Sir or Madam I am Mohammadreza Hadavi, one of your guests in the event, which
is
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took place today. I am writing
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 letter with regard to a problem
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 which I am
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.
when
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When
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 I
received
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 home, I noticed that I
lost
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 my insurance papers. I believe that I put them on the table, located next to the
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 window in
conference
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 room. Actually, I must give
back them
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them back
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 to
insurance
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the insurance
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 company in order to deal with them.
An
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 addition, my private information from personal
detail
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 to bank account is on
papers
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paper
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.
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, I am a bit
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 about accessing someone to them. I have a
kindly
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 request, if it
be
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 possible to find and save them for me. I
also
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 provided my phone number
on
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 the top of
letter
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. Please, don’t hesitate to call me and request more information about them. I really appreciate your assistance in
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 matter. I eagerly wait for your response. Yours faithfully, Mohammadreza Hadavi

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format
Make sure to start your letter with 'Dear Sir or Madam,' and end it with 'Yours faithfully,' to follow the correct format.
coherence
Try to use clearer sentences and connect your ideas better for easier reading.
task achievement
Explain why the papers are important more clearly, maybe with a sentence about their importance to your life.
content
You clearly stated where you think you left the papers.
tone
You were polite in your request and expressed appreciation, which is good for tone.
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