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The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The aforementioned figure illustrates the process of making cup noodles.
Overall
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, there are eight stages involved in the production , and five pieces of equipment are required to complete the manufacturing procedure.
Firstly
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, the flour from the storage silos is put into the mixer
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 water and oil. The mixture is
then
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 kneaded to form a dough. The dough is rolled by a roller to form sheets and
then
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 cut into strips. These are
then
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 made into noodle discs. These discs are
then
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 fried in cooking oil to make them crispy.
Next,
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seasonings,
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 as vegetables
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 and spices, are added to make them flavorful, after which the discs are left to dry. Once dried, the noodles are
then
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 placed into cups, sealed, and labelled.
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, the cups are ready to be delivered to the stores.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Manufacturing process
  • Noodle dough
  • Steaming
  • Cutting
  • Dough sheeting
  • Molding
  • Air-drying
  • Frying
  • Seasoning
  • Quality control
  • Packaging
  • Shelf life
  • Flavoring agents
  • Texture
  • Instant meal
  • Convenience food
  • Production line
  • Consumer
  • Ingredient mixing
  • Safety standards
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