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The chart below shows the total number of minutes(in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the total number of minutes(in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart depicts the time spent on talking on the telephone by UK residents
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 in three different types (local, national and international, mobiles) between 1995 and 2002. Units are measured in
billion
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minutes
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.
Overall
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while
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 the mostly used type of call is local-fixed
line
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, the least popular is mobiles (all calls).
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, the gap difference between all three types of calls had decreased over time. Local-fixed
line
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 took the lead in all the period given, starting with over 70
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minutes
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 in 1995, gradually increasing, reaching its peak at precisely 90
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minutes
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 in 1999, before declining steadily to its initial figure in 2002. Despite its decrease for the past 3 years, it was still the most used
line
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. National and
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international fixed
line
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 was the second highest, starting with almost 40
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minutes
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 in 1995. It climbed up to reach its peak at over 60
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minutes
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 in 2001, and remained unchanged for the next year. Mobiles were the least used call type. As time passed, they became more popular, and by 2002, it apexed at approximately 45
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minutes
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Vocabulary: Replace the words billion, minutes, line with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • total number of minutes
  • telephone calls
  • categories
  • local – fixed line
  • national and international – fixed line
  • mobiles
  • general trend
  • yearly totals
  • significant changes
  • milestones
  • data
  • rise significantly
  • decline
  • steady increase
  • fluctuate
  • peak
  • exponential growth
  • over the period
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