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Band 6

You are going on a business trip for few days and have arranged to leave your children with a friend who will look after them. Write a letter to your friend including -tell your friend what kind of food your children like and dislike. - give details of activity your children enjoy. - Suggest arrangements for collecting your children after your trip

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Dear Sam, Hope you are doing well and are in good spirits. I am writing
this
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 letter to express my excitement that I am going on my
dreamed
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 business trip and I want you to do me
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a favor
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favor
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favour
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by caring
my
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for my
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 both children when I
will be
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am
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 far away from them. If I talk about their
dietery
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dietary
 preferences, they love to eat pasta and cereals with mild milk. They do not like to eat non-vegetarian food and they will never touch it if you try to serve them. I humbly request you to take care of them by providing their favourite food. My
both
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children are highly engaged in doing physical activities
such
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 as they love to play football, Cycling and
hang
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hanging
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 out with their friends. So, you can simply accompany them by taking them to the park where they can enjoy these activities with you. As I am expecting that I will reach home at 6 o'clock
in
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on
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the
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friday
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Friday
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 evening. If you do not mind, Can you drop off my children at my place
please
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, please
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? It would be great for me to thank you and will meet you once again. Hope to hear back from you soon! Warm Regards, Zen.

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Include a closing sentence to emphasize appreciation for your friend's help and express excitement for your trip.
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Briefly mention a backup plan if any unexpected situation occurs (e.g., if your flight is delayed).
coherence cohesion
Try to avoid redundancy in expressions, such as 'I humbly request you to take care of them by providing their favourite food'.
task achievement
The letter uses a friendly and appreciative tone throughout, which is very suitable for writing to a friend.
coherence cohesion
The letter clearly separates different topics into distinct paragraphs, enhancing readability.
coherence cohesion
The closing is inviting and warm, which leaves a positive impression.
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