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Some people think that robots are important for humans’ future development. Other think that robot have negative effects on society. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Development of
technology
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 brings new
dicussion
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discussion
 topics. One of them
about
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is about
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robots
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 and
impact
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the impact
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 of
this
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technology
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. Some people argue that robotic
systems
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 are
crucial
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crucial,
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while
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other
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others
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 say there are some disadvantages for society. I
belive
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believe
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 both views have strong arguments. I cannot
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deny
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 that
technology
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 provides
convinience
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convenience
 in our lives.
Robots
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 can help us with work that no one wants to do
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such
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, such
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 as
,
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apply
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 collecting garbage, cleaning, dusting, manual labour and dangerous ones. Thanks to
development
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the development
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 of robotic
systems
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,
quality
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the quality
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 of life for humans
have
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has
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 been improved.
Additionally
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,
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this
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these
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systems
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 are
also
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 significant for
progress
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the progress
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 of the
technology
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. Scientists benefit from
robots
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 for their scientific experiments.
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,
while
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robots
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 can handle
with
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apply
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though
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tough
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jobs
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, people who do these
jobs
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 for a living will lose
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their
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jobs
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.
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,
rate
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the rate
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 of
unemployement
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unemployment
 will significantly increase in the future.
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, if
robots
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be
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are
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the
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a
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 part of other
jobs
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 like
doctor
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doctors
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 or
soldier
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soldiers
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, it can be dangerous for humanity. Since
robots
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 do not have any emotions, they kill or heal people insensitively.
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, society will become unemotional and cruel as well. In conclusion, there are both pros and cons about
robots
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.
However
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,
in
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from
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 my point of view, the disadvantages outweigh the advantages. Unstoppable development of robotic
systems
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 may cause crucial problems
on
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for
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 the future society.

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coherence and cohesion
Try to make your introduction clearer by stating both sides of the argument more distinctly.
coherence and cohesion
In your conclusion, summarize the main points more clearly to strengthen your argument.
task achievement
Add more specific examples or statistics to support your ideas about the advantages and disadvantages of robots.
coherence and cohesion
Use simple linking words like 'firstly', 'secondly', 'however', and 'for example' to improve the flow of your essay.
task achievement
The essay presents both sides of the argument, showing understanding of the topic.
task achievement
You include some relevant examples, like jobs affected by robots, which helps support your points.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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