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The charts below show average age of men and women retired from work in seven countries in 2004 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show average age of men and women retired from work in seven countries in 2004 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given bar charts present data on the average
retirement
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age
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 of male and female
workers
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 in seven European regions in the years 2004 and 2008.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the average
retirement
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age
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 increased noticeably for both
genders
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 across most countries over the given period. Sweden had the highest
retirement
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age
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 in both years,
while
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France
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 and Italy recorded the lowest for the two
genders
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. In 2004, the
retirement
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age
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 for male
workers
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 ranged from about 58 in
France
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 to just over 63 in Sweden. Denmark, Germany, the Netherlands, and the UK all had
retirement
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 ages for
men
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 between 61 and 63 years. Female
workers
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 in the same year generally retired a little bit earlier than male
workers
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.
For instance
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, in Denmark,
women
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 retired at around 60 compared to 62 for
men
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, and in
France
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, the figure was approximately 58 for
women
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 versus 59 for
men
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. Italy showed little gender difference, with
men
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 and
women
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 retiring at around 60. By 2008, most countries experienced a slight rise in the
retirement
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age
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 for
men
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as well as
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women
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. In Sweden, the average
age
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 for both
genders
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 rose to nearly 64, remaining the highest among all countries. Germany and the Netherlands
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 saw moderate growth, with
retirement
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 ages for the two
genders
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 approaching 62 or 63.
In contrast
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, Italy showed no notable change, and
France
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 remained the country with the lowest
retirement
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 ages, despite a small increase among
men
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words retirement, age, workers, genders, france, men, women with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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