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The plans below show the site of a farm in 1950 and the same site today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two diagrams compare various changes of the Beechwood
Farm
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 from 1950 to the present.
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, the track has been replaced with a brand new road for the citizens and visitors more easy to access the
farm
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. The Road divided Beechwood
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farm
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Farm
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up to
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into
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 two sides. The left hand has been kept from its origin
from
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since
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 the
1950
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1950s
 with the Fruit trees, Soft fruits and the Vegetables. But they had put a small
farm
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 shop in the fruit trees area for the customers to
buying
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buy
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 souvenirs before they left nowadays. The most remarkable
, The
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that the
 sheep pen has been separated into two parts, each of
them
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which
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 has its own parking lot. The one near the street has become a camping field and the parking is at the corner,
faces with
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facing
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 the
farm
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 shop
at
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on
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 the other side of the street. The other has become a place for the Solar panels in order to produce energy for the whole
farm
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, it’s
also
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 a car park in front of it.
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, at the south, near the river,
t he
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the
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 Barn has been moved from the top of the Farmhouse, to the side between the farmer’s house and the coop. Its old Barn place has been replaced
into
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with
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 the Holiday cottages. In summary, those changes aimed
to
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at
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 the
public
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public's
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 needs and the
farm
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 has been improved day by day to be better and become an attractive place to visit.

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure to clearly separate the main points and organize them in a logical way. This will make it easier for the reader to follow your ideas.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure to use clear topic sentences for each paragraph to outline what you will discuss in that part.
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Try to give a clearer introduction and conclusion. An introduction should state what you will talk about and the conclusion should summarize your main points.
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Use more specific examples to back up your points. Instead of just stating changes, explain why they are important or how they specifically benefit the farm.
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You provided specific details about the changes, such as the new road and the location of the barn. This adds depth to your writing.
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Your writing covers most of the significant changes from 1950 to today, showing a good understanding of the task.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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