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The bar chart below shows transport preferences among young people in four countries in a single year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows transport preferences among young people in four countries in a single year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart provides information about
the
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apply
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which type of transport
would young
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young people would
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people
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 choose in the
UK
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,the US,
France
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 and Italy per year.
Overall
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,it can be clearly seen that,in all four
countries
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countries,
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 young
people
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 would like to ride a car,car choose
have
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has
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significant
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a significant
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 difference
than
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from
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 others
,
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.
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France
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 citizens prefer cars less than other nations.In the
UK
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 and
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France
Add a comma
France,
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people
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 want to go
with
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by
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bycycle
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bicycle
,
while
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 in the US and
Italy
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Italy,
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 they
dont
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don't
 like that think.
In addition
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,the US
sitizens
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citizens
 prefer motorcycles more than other countries.
To begin
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 with,the US young
people
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favour
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favoured
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were
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motorcycles more than others,they
have
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had
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 60,whilst in
other
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the other
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 three(the
UK
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,
France
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 and Italy)
this
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 rate was around 10.
France
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 young generation
love
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loves
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 to go
with
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by
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 bicycle,they have the
most
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apply
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highest indicator in the given chart,approximately 45.The US
rezidents
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residents
 pick out
motorcycle
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a motorcycle
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,about 30,the
UK
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 follow
this
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and
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, and
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bicycle
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the bicycle
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choose
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choice
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 is 30.
Car
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Cars
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 are the most popular
choose
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choice
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,
people
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 around all
given
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the given
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 countries prefer cars mostly.In Italy
just
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, just
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 above 70,in the
UK
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,the US
they
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, they
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 have
same
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the same
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,about 60,and in
France
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40
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, 40
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.Italy
rezidents dont
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residents don't
 select other
transports
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transport
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,
motorcycle
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the motorcycle
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 is just beyond 10,bicycle is just over 10.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, uk, france with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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