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With the rise of e-books comes the decline in paper books. Some people think that it is a good speed forward, while others do not. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend?

There is an argument that nowadays
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books
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more gained
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gained more
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 popularity over
books
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.
Increasing
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The increasing
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 number of
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books
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 has both advantages and disadvantages.
This
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pros
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the pros
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 and cons of
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books
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. Some people say that
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books
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movable
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a movable
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 bookshelf since you can buy and keep your
favorite
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favourite
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 or interesting
books
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 in just one app or one device.
This
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 is one of the advantages of
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books
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. You can read it anywhere or anytime you desire. It is very convenient because you don'
t
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 have to carry many
books
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 with you all the time, which is heavy and hard to keep
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in
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good shape.
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books
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doesn'
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don't
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t
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 need us to take care of that much. Next thing is you can zoom in or zoom out to adjust
size
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the size
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 of letters to feel comfortable for your eyes
while
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 you are reading.
Books
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 can'
t
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 do that. In some old
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books
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books,
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 the
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letters
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 were sometimes too small
too
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to
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 read and you need to use some devices,
such
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 as
,
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 glasses
to
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, to
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 get a better vision..... In terms of disadvantages,
while
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 you read an e-book, you need
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 internet to access it. If you don'
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 have
an
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internet, you can'
t
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 read it at all. You may
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 about it.
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, there
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 some research that
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suggests
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 blue light from electronic devices can cause damage to our eyes. They
also
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 said
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staring
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 at
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an iPad
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 or
computer
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a computer
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 can cause our eyes
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to be tired
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. You can experience some
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blurred
 vision. So, you have to rest and look away outside to
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the window
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 and look at
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the sky
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 or
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a tree
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 for a
while
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which
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, which
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 sometimes may interrupt our reading. Another reason is
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that some
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e-
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books
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write
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be written
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or
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in or
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note
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notes
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 anything in
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apply
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e-
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books
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. If you want to note something, you might need some
papers
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paper
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 to write it down.
Eventhough
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Even
,
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books
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has
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 both advantages and disadvantages. You must accept that it is more convenient than paper
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.

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task achievement
Make sure to clearly introduce the topic in the introduction. A good introduction should outline what the essay will discuss.
coherence cohesion
Try to use clearer topic sentences for each paragraph to help the reader understand the main point.
coherence cohesion
Avoid repeating the same words. Use synonyms to make your writing more interesting.
coherence cohesion
Check for grammatical errors. For example, 'e-books has' should be 'e-books have'.
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Add more specific examples to support your points. For instance, mention specific e-reader devices or how e-books can be accessed.
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You addressed both the advantages and disadvantages of e-books, which is good.
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You used some good ideas about convenience and eye comfort, which are relevant to the topic.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • digital revolution
  • sustainability
  • e-reader
  • digital rights management (DRM)
  • nostalgia
  • tangible
  • bibliophile
  • innovation
  • disruptive technology
  • screen fatigue
  • monetization
  • brick-and-mortar
  • obsolescence
  • cloud storage
  • multimedia features
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