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You have just read an article in a national newspaper which claims that town centres in your country all look very similar to each other. You don't fully agree with this opinion. Write a letter to the editor of the newspaper. In your letter • say which points in the article you agree with • explain ways in which your town centre is different from most other town centres • offer to give a guided tour of your town to the writer of the article

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
you
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 because I would like to give you my opinion on your article about town centres which you published in a national newspaper called Denik. First of
all
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all,

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 I have to agree with the part where you mentioned a shape and an organization of main squares. Most of them have a rounded shape with lots of different shops around and
to
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a fountain in the
center
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centre

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.
However
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, I found the
center
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centre

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 of Brno quite different from most
of
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other
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the other

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 cities. Mostly because it has nice older architecture combined with
modern
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a modern

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 style. Brno has
also
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 one unique difference
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that
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which

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 is that a tram goes right across
of
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the middle of the main square.
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Also
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 the main train station
together with
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tram
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the tram

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 station is placed right under the main square, which is not so common in other cities.
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At
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 the end, I would like to offer a tour
in
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 Brno in
hope
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the hope

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 that it could change your opinion. If you decide to visit my town, please don't hesitate to contact me. I will be more than happy to show you the beauty of
this
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 city. Yours faithfully,

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Task Achievement
To further enhance your letter, try to provide more specific examples or details when discussing what makes your town unique. For instance, mentioning a particular building or event could offer a richer narrative.
Coherence and Cohesion
While your letter is well structured, consider including transitional phrases between paragraphs to improve the flow of information and make your argument even more persuasive.
Greeting and Closing
Your introduction and conclusion are clear and effective, providing a good opening and a cordial close to your letter.
Single Idea per Paragraph
You've successfully separated your response into coherent paragraphs, each focusing on a single idea, which greatly aids readability.
Suitable Writing Tone
Your tone is appropriately formal and respectful, suitable for a letter to a newspaper editor, contributing positively to the overall effect of your letter.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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