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The charts below show the reasons why people travel to work by bicycle or by car. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the reasons why people travel to work by bicycle or by car. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie charts
illustarte
Correct your spelling
illustrate
 the reasons for travel to
job
Correct article usage
the job
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 by
car
Use synonyms
 and bicycle.
Overall
Linking Words
, most
people
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using
Wrong verb form
use
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cycle
Correct article usage
a cycle
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 for health and fitness, and for the reduction of pollution
,
Punctuation problem
. In
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in addition
Linking Words
, fewer
people
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 want to save
the
Correct article usage
apply
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time with
bike
Correct article usage
a bike
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,
while
Linking Words
majority
Correct article usage
the majority
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 of
people
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using
Wrong verb form
use
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Use synonyms
car
Correct article usage
a car
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 for
the
Correct article usage
apply
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comfort and long
distance
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distances
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.
Firstly
Linking Words
, everyone
using
Wrong verb form
uses
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cycle
Correct article usage
a cycle
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 for
work
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beacuse
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because
 of the health issues and
for controlling
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to control
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pollotion
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pollution
. 30%
people
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 for each
reasons
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reason
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 and
overall
Linking Words
 60%
people
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cummuting
Correct your spelling
commuting
 with
bicycle
Correct article usage
a bicycle
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 for these two reasons.
Moreover
Linking Words
, other
employee
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employees
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 using
bike
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bikes
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 to avoid parking problems and save money
is
Correct subject-verb agreement
are
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 15% and 13% respectively,
while
Linking Words
 only 12%
people
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using
Wrong verb form
use
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this
Linking Words
 to avoid traffic and consume less time than
Use synonyms
car
Correct article usage
a car
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 to reach
at
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apply
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work
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.
Lastly
Linking Words
, many workers
using
Wrong verb form
use
show examples
Use synonyms
car
Correct article usage
a car
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 for comfort travel with 40%, and 21%
labors
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labourers
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using
Wrong verb form
use
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four
Correct determiner usage
a
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wheeler
Use the right word
four-wheeler
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 because of
long
Correct article usage
the long
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comutting
Correct your spelling
commuting
 distance
of
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to
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work
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, which is
easy
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easier
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 with
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car
Correct article usage
a car
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.
Furthermore
Linking Words
, 14%
people
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 choose
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car
Correct article usage
a car
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 for carrying instruments and other things to
work
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, and the same proportion travelling
with
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by
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car
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 because it is faster than
Use synonyms
car
Correct article usage
the car
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. The lowest percentage of
worker
Fix the agreement mistake
workers
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 using
four
Correct determiner usage
a
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wheeler
Use the right word
four-wheeler
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 as
Correct article usage
a safe
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safe
Correct word choice
safer
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 vehicle than
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car
Correct article usage
a car
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall, while".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words car, people, work with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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