In some countries, even though the rates of serious crimes are decreasing, people feel less safe than ever before. What do you think are the causes of this problem? What measures could be taken to tackle this problem?

Many people feel
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safety is a common problem in many countries around the world. In
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essay, I would like to explore some of the reasons for
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modern phenomenon and offer some possible solutions to deal with it.
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, I believe one of the main reasons why some feel less secure than in the past is because of messaging crime stories or news on social media.
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community
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in the past committed harmful actions more than these days, they were not published on the platforms, which means not many individuals feel uncomfortable or
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scared
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like now. There is no easy answer to
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, but the government could limit what is published for public consumption.
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would definitely help reduce the problem of public fear. Another contributing factor reducing the sense of security is hearing personal experiences about crimes from friends or family. One result of
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is that it makes
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fear stranger individuals and influences their effectiveness in society. Perhaps the media could run awareness campaigns to highlight the need for action,
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as creating TV shows to let society know that the rate of crimes is decreasing, which would definitely help to tackle the problem of anxiety over offences.
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public fear is certainly very common, perhaps the above-mentioned ideas could help solve or at least alleviate the issues.

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Make sure to clearly express your main ideas and support them with examples.
coherence
Use clear transitions between ideas to improve the flow of the essay.
coherence
Ensure that your conclusion summarizes your main points effectively.
positive contrast
The introduction clearly states the topic and the purpose of the essay.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general
Topic Vocabulary:
  • availability heuristic
  • media coverage
  • misinformation
  • urbanization
  • community cohesion
  • justice system
  • economic inequality
  • community policing
  • media literacy
  • surveillance
  • swift justice
  • social cohesion
  • neighborhood watch
  • deterrent
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