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Some people say that it is better to work for a large company than a small one. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

It is argued by many that working in
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corporations
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 is a better choice than working in
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 small
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companies
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.
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 essay completely disagrees with
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 statement because large
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 wouldn't develop the person's career as much as
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small
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. Working in a fresh company would develop the worker's carees, in other word, people who work in these kind of environments would develop many skills because there is less employees to rely on compared to the large
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 that have alot of workers in the same field, if a person found himself or herself in the job without anyone to help they will be eager to learn and they will be self-independent, which would advance their personalities, and they would have a great time management skills because they have many tasks to do at the same time,
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, Oxford University reported that workers in small
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 have a higher rate in career development by 30% compared to those who work in large
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. People always tend to prefer large
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 because of the higher salaries there and the speed of promotions, it is a safer choice compared to the huge effort that they would do in the other
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 with much less benefits ,
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, employees in small
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 don't get a health insurance
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 they work more hours than the employees in huge
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. In conclusion, people always prefer big
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they have, but those
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 wouldn't expand the person's experiences like small
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Make your introduction clearer by stating your opinion directly.
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Try to use linking words to connect your ideas better, such as 'firstly,' 'secondly,' and 'finally.'
coherence cohesion
Check spelling and grammar, especially for words like 'careers,' 'companies,' and 'health insurance.'
task achievement
You provide a good argument about the advantages of small companies.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • corporate culture
  • hierarchy
  • marketability
  • professional development
  • entrepreneurial
  • autonomy
  • networking
  • prestigious
  • job security
  • scale of operations
  • benefits package
  • research and development
  • innovation
  • professional networking
  • career advancement
  • organizational structure
  • flatter hierarchy
  • versatile skill set
  • benefits
  • work-life balance
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