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In some areas of the United States, a curfew is imposed, in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompanied by an adult . What is your opinion about this?

In some regions of the USA, a curfew is imposed,
in
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apply
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which for teenagers
is
Correct subject-verb agreement
are
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 not available to be out of doors after a particular time,
while
Linking Words
 some
saying
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say
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at
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that at
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night
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night,
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 unless they are accompanied by an adult. I personally believe that
,
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apply
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 there should be
regulation
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regulations
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 on
teenagers
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teenagers'
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life
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lives
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, as it can be dangerous to out of
doors
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outdoors
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. O

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introduction
The introduction needs to clearly present your opinion on curfews directly. Try to state your viewpoint clearly in one sentence.
conclusion
Make sure to have a clear conclusion that summarizes your opinion and supports your main points.
support
Provide more specific examples to support your ideas. For instance, explain how curfews can help keep teenagers safe or provide a real-life example related to your opinion.
opinion
You clearly state your belief in the need for regulations on teenagers' activities, which shows a clear position on the topic.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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