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The charts below show what percentage of their daily intake of various nutrients the average person in the USA consumes in each meal and in snacks. These nutrients may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

The charts below show what percentage of their daily intake of various nutrients the average person in the USA consumes in each meal and in snacks. These nutrients may be unhealthy if eaten too much.
The pie charts represent the
propotion
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proportion
 of the average United States
citizent’s
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citizen’s
 daily intake of different nutrients in every meal and
snacks
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. The
abudant
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abundant
consume
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 of them may be unhealthy.
Sodium
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 and saturated fat have
a
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apply
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quite the same percentage of sources where they may be obtained. Dinner is the biggest source of these nutrients, 43% of
sodium
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 and 37% of saturated fat are taken from it. After the dinner, a quarter of saturated fat and
one third
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 of
sodium
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 are obtained from lunch. The same
propotoins
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proportions
 of
sodium
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 are taken from breakfast and
snacks
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, 14% for each.
Snacks
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 give 21% of
daily
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 intake of saturated fat, and breakfast takes the
last
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 place, 16%. Added sugar has completely different
propotions
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proportions
 of its sources.
While
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snacks
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 are not the main sources of
soduim
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sodium
, they are the biggest way of obtaining added sugar. Dinner takes second place of
expanding
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the expanding
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 amount of added sugar, 23%. Breakfast provides the smallest amount of
these all
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all these
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 nutrients.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words snacks, sodium with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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