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The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.
he
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 line chart illustrates the proportion of
Coffee
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 and tea consumption habits in five Australian
citiies
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cities
. In general,there were significant differences among the categories. Going to a cafe
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 for
coffee
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 or tea was the most popular
habits
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habit
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 in Sydney,Melbourne,Brisbane and Hobart,
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Whereas
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whereas
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 buying instant
coffee
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 was the most common in Adelaide compared with other habits. It's clear that
,
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the percentage of buying fresh
coffee
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 was the least in all five cities in
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last
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the last
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 4 weeks. In detail,the proportion of going to a cafe
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 was two times more than buying fresh
coffee
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 in Melbourne,Brisbane,Adelaide and Hobart.It was ranked highest among all the cities
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the
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Melborne
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Melbourne
 with 64%.
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,the percentage of buying fresh
coffee
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 in Brisbane was at
bottom
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 of the
ranke
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range
 with 34%.In Adelaide,the
propotion
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proportion
 of going to a cafe
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 for
coffee
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 or tea and buying instant
coffee
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 were both about 50%.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • survey results
  • coffee and tea buying habits
  • instant coffee
  • fresh coffee
  • cafe culture
  • social influences
  • economic factors
  • city demographics
  • seasonal trends
  • marketing strategies
  • consumer preferences
  • availability
  • popularity
  • consumption patterns
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