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The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

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The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.
The bar chart illustrates the
proportion
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 of residents in five cities in Australia,who bought fresh
coffee
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 ,bought
instant
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coffee
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,and went to a
cafe
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 for
coffee
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 or tea in
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last
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the last
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 4 weeks. The
numebr
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number
 of
people
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 who went to a
cafe
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 accounts for the largest percentage of city residents in almost
of
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all
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 cities,except for
Adelaide
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,
whereas
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 the
proportion
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 of
people
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 who bought fresh
coffee
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 is the smallest in all of the cities.The
overall
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 results in Brisbane and
Adelaide
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is
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are
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 similar,with
comparatively
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a comparatively
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the
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apply
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low
proportion
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 of
people
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of
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apply
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going to a
cafe
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. In terms of
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Sydney
,Melbourne and Hobart,the
amount
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number
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 of
people
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 who went to a
cafe
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 for
coffee
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 or tea occupies the largest
proportion
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 of city
persons
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people
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,all over 60%.The number of residents who bought
instant
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coffee
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 is the second largest,with Sydney(about 46%),Melbourne(about 48%)and Hobart(about 54%).The smallest
proportion
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 of city
people
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 is the
people
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 who
of buying
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buy
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 fresh
coffee
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. In Brisbane and
Adelaide
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,the figure of
people
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of
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apply
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buying fresh
coffee
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 is still
smallest
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the smallest
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 percentage,both close to 35%.The percentage of
people
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 who bought
instant
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 is the largest in
Adelaide
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 at about 50%,followed by that of
people
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 who went to
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cafe
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a cafe
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.
In contrast
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,the
proportion
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 of
people
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 who went to a
cafe
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 is higher than that of
people
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 of buying
instant
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coffee
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words proportion, coffee, instant, cafe, people, adelaide with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 6 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • survey results
  • coffee and tea buying habits
  • instant coffee
  • fresh coffee
  • cafe culture
  • social influences
  • economic factors
  • city demographics
  • seasonal trends
  • marketing strategies
  • consumer preferences
  • availability
  • popularity
  • consumption patterns
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