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The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.
The bar chart illustrates the percentages of residents in five Australian cities—Sydney,
Melbourne
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, Brisbane,
Adelaide
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, and Hobart—who engaged in three
coffee
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 and tea-related activities over the previous four weeks
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 buying fresh
coffee
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, buying instant
coffee
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, and going to a café for
coffee
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 or tea.
Overall
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, visiting a café for
coffee
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 or tea was the most common activity in most cities,
whereas
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 purchasing fresh
coffee
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 was the least popular habit across all five locations. In detail, going to a cafe for
coffee
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 or tea was the dominant behaviour in Sydney,
Melbourne
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, and Hobart, with around 61%, 64%, and 63% of residents respectively choosing
this
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 option.
In contrast
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, buying fresh
coffee
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 was the least frequent activity, with Brisbane and
Adelaide
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 recording the lowest rates at approximately 34% each. When it comes to instant
coffee
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 purchases, Hobart had the highest percentage of buyers at 54%, followed closely by Brisbane at 52% and
Adelaide
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 at 50%. Sydney and
Melbourne
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 had slightly lower figures, at 46% and 48% respectively. Notably,
while
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Melbourne
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 had the highest café visit rate, it
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 had a relatively low fresh
coffee
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 purchase rate of 42%.
Adelaide
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,
on the other hand
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, shared Brisbane’s low fresh
coffee
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 consumption of 33% but had a slightly lower café visit rate at 49%. In summary, café visits were the most prevalent
coffee
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 and tea-related habit among residents of these Australian cities, and instant
coffee
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 was generally more popular than fresh
coffee
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 as a purchase choice.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words melbourne, adelaide, coffee, café with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • survey results
  • coffee and tea buying habits
  • instant coffee
  • fresh coffee
  • cafe culture
  • social influences
  • economic factors
  • city demographics
  • seasonal trends
  • marketing strategies
  • consumer preferences
  • availability
  • popularity
  • consumption patterns
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