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Although there are a lot of translation software available, learning a language could still be advantageous. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 254 words.

In today's digital era,
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 software
such
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 as Google
translate
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Translate
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 and DeepL
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 made it easier than ever to understand foreign languages with a few taps.
While
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 these technological taps are
being
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 the most common. I strongly believe that learning
new
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language
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 is better and useful than
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 platforms. On the one hand,
language
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 learning
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fosters
 meaningful human connections and
to
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helps to
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 understand culture.
While
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 software can translate ideas in
full
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 version.
it
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 often fails to capture tone, context, and
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cultural
 nuance.
For example
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,
idiomic
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idiomatic
 expressions like Japanese or Arabic are frequently mistranslated or flattened by machines.
In contrast
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, a person who learns the
language
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 can engage in more respectful and emotionally intelligent communication and better understanding.
This
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 is particularly crucial in diplomacy, international business, and tourism.
Although
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,
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for
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people
in
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abroad
,
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 can use
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 in their
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software
,
such
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 as on their mobile phones
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 or other gadgets,
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 presence of caring individuals in old age is essential.
On the other hand
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,
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 a new
language
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 improves cognitive abilities
such
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 as memory,
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, and multitasking. Numerous studies show that
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bilingual
 individuals often have better concentration and mental flexibility.
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Furthermore
, learning a
language
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 can open academic and professional opportunities in global markets where native or advanced
language
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 skills are highly valued.
Translation
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 tools may assist with communication, but they cannot replace the confidence and competence of speaking fluently during an interview or business meeting. In conclusion,
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While
translation
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 tools are useful, they cannot replicate the richness of learning a new tongue. The ability to speak another
language
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 fluently remains a powerful skill that enhances cultural and
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, better
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 understanding, brain function, and personal growth.

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coherence
Try to improve sentence structure and grammar. Some sentences are hard to understand due to errors. For example, 'translation software such as Google translate and DeepL had made it easier' should use 'has made' instead. Also, pay closer attention to spelling mistakes like 'culturural' and 'Whilr'.
task achievement
You provided good examples of how learning a language can help with culture and communication.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural Appreciation
  • Cognitive Flexibility
  • Idiomatic Expressions
  • Career Advancement
  • Multilingual
  • Proficiency
  • Empathy
  • Cultural Barriers
  • Native Speaker Fluency
  • Colloquialisms
  • Language Acquisition
  • Immersive Experience
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