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The chart below show the number of households in US by their annual income in 2007,2011,and 2015

The chart below show the number of households in US by their annual income in 2007,2011,and 2015
The bar chart demonstrates the volume of
households
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 in the US by their yearly salaries in 2007,2001
and
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 2015.
Overall
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, the annual
income
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 lower than 49999 and higher than 100000 revealed a different
trend
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,
while
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 the number of
households
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 by their annual
income
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 between 50000 and 99999 maintained a stable
trend
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 over the three years. As seen, there was an increasing
trend
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 in how much of
the
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US
households
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 by annual
income
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 less
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then
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 25000 and from 25000 to 49999 between 2007 and 2011, starting from
25millions
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25 million
 to 328
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millions
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million
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 and 28
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millions
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million
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 to 30
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millions
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,respectively. After that, the figure of them reduced ,
reached at
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 26 and 28
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millions
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,respectively.
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,the figure for
income
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 more than 100000 showed an opposite
trend
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, decreasing before increasing , from 29
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millions
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 to 27
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millions
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,
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finally
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 it peaked at 33 million in 2015. As for the number of US
households
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 by annual
income
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 between 50000 and 74999, and between 75000 and
99999
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 both remained moderately, with 20
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millions
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million
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 and 15
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millions
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 over the years.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words households, income, trend, millions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 4 times.
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