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The table and pie charts below show the number of research students in Australian universities in 2001 and 2010.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table and pie charts below show the number of research students in Australian universities in 2001 and 2010.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table and pie charts illustrate the
number
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 of foreign and local research
students
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 in Australian universities in 2001 and 2010, and their gender proportions in the given years.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 local
students
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 made up the majority of the total
number
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 of
students
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, but international
students
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 increased their presence in later years.
While
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 the proportion of the genders of local
students
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 remained almost the same, the proportion of international male and female
students
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 altered drastically over time. It is noticeable that in 2001, international
students
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 accounted for only about one-sixth of the
number
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 of local
students
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. But in 2010, foreign learners doubled in
number
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 and reached 14,593,
whereas
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 the total
number
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 of all
students
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also
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 increased from 2001 to 2010 by over 15,000. A gender proportion,
on the other hand
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, stayed almost unchanged for locals , making only 3% difference in 2010 compared to 1% difference in 2001.
However
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, females became more dominant in the year 2010 among foreign research
students
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 , making up 15% of the total
number
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 of international
students
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.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, students with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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