The bar chart shows the divorce rates in two European countries from 2011 to 2015. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the divorce rates in two European countries from 2011 to 2015. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The bar chart shows the divorce rates in two European countries from 2011 to 2015. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given bar data illustrates the divorce rate in
two
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the two
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most popular countries
such
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as Finland and Sweden
in
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, in
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Europe from the time period of 2011 to 2015.
Overall
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, both
the
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apply
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countries experienced
change
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a change
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in divorce rates. Sweden's rate increased
steadliy
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steadily
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whereas
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, whereas
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Finland's rate
were
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was
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more variable.
In
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At
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the beginning of 2011, Finland
registerd
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registered
the
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apply
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35 % of divorce cases, later
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data fluctuated with slight variations in 2012 and again rose to
approx
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approximately
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39 % in 2013. In
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last
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the last
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two
years
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years,
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this
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ratio was stable and no
siginifacant
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significant
change was observed,
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While
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On
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on the other hand
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, Sweden highlighted the major increase in
divored
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divorce
rates in
starting
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the first
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two years
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such
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, such
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as 42 % in 2011, 49 % in 2012. After that,
this
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proportion
was
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apply
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decline
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declined
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to 44 %, 42 % and 38 % respectively.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "such".
Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • divorce
  • rate
  • country
  • year
  • show
  • change
  • increase
  • decrease
  • higher
  • lower
  • trend
  • comparison
  • data
  • overall
  • feature
  • attitude
  • peaks
  • fluctuation
  • years
  • society
  • European
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