In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

As the technology is developing, agriculture has
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improved
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quality and production.
However
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, there are parts of the world where humans are still
starve
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due to
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the lack of
food
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.
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essay will explain the reason
of
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this
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problem and give some
solution
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to deal with it.
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with, the primary contributor
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this
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phenomenon is the poverty of some
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area
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around the world. Many countries
such
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as Angola or Lebanon are suffering
with
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the expense of produce, as they don’t have the ability to grow their own vegetables and raise
cattles
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cattle
.
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, they have to buy it from
other
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country.
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, the unstable of allocating
agriculture
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agricultural
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product
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products
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for
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some domestic
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area
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also
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lead
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to
the
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lack of
food
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.
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, taxes and prices are increasing, so it will affect the
food
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prices. To deal with that problem, we have three main
solution
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.
First,
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the
goverment
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government
should lower the
fee
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fees
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and taxes for selling produce. By
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the prices, the
resident
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residents
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will purchase
food
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much
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easier
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.
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, the cheaper
food
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would feed some people in the
area
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with a little charge,
allows
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them to save money or cure the pain.
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the globe should help and encourage other countries which are still poor and do not have the advantage
in
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of
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producing
food
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with
agriculture
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machines.
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we should allocate the proportion of
food
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for some
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area
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around the globe.

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task response
Make sure your introduction clearly outlines the main points you will discuss in your essay. This helps provide a clear roadmap for your readers.
coherence and cohesion
Try to use linking words to connect your ideas. This can make your writing flow better and help your readers understand your points.
task response
Include more specific examples to support your ideas. For instance, mention specific programs or initiatives that have successfully reduced hunger in certain areas.
task response
You present the issue clearly and show that you understand the problem of hunger in the world.
task response
You provide some potential solutions, which is a good way to engage with the topic.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general
Topic Vocabulary:
  • inequality
  • distribution
  • access to resources
  • climate change
  • natural disasters
  • political factors
  • economic factors
  • agricultural practices
  • infrastructure
  • transportation
  • population growth
  • education
  • knowledge
  • food waste
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