In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

In today’s society,
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to
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the succeed
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succeed
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of
technology
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agriculture has many significant growth.
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, there are lots of
people
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around the
world haven’t
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worldn’t have
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enough
food
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to eat.
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my perspective, the roots of
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problem
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originated from fast
population
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growth in some countries
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, and
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cost
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the cost
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of
food
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is expensive
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that
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should be
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by enhancing
policy
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of
population
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and
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policies and
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supporting
people
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who go hungry. The key reason behind
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issue is
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population
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that population
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grow fastly lead to
food
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is not
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apply
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enough
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apply
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to share
to
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among
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all
people
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.
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, when a place has
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number of
people
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common
be
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to be
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poor and
bad
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have a poor
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living quality.
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, many
people
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in India go hungry because
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country has
highest
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number of
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apply
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population
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.
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, the cost of
food
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is increasing
everyday
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every day
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so that some
people
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with
low-income
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low income
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do have
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have not
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not have
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ability
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the ability
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to purchase
food
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. Nowadays,
food
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which produced
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with high
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technology and
right
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the right
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process is
costly
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includes
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including
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rice, meat, etc.
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, the cost of rice in Vietnam
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has increase
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increase
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in recent
year
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years
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hence
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; hence
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, many
people
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don’t have enough money to buy rice and go hungry. The most
recomment
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recommended
solutions for
this
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problem are enhancing
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policy
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the policy
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of
population
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and supporting hungry
people
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with
special
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a special
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policy
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.
Gorvement
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should
depict
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implement
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some
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a
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policy
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which can decrease
population
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growth
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such
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, such
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as families have
numbers
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number
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of children more
than
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who
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suggestion
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apply
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will pay taxes for gorvement.
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, unemployment
is lead
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leads
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to poor and.

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task response
Task response: The essay tries to answer why people go hungry and how to fix it. It needs a clear plan. State the reason first, then the solution. Give one or two real examples.
coherence cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Use a clear form. Intro, body, and conclusion. Each paragraph should have one main idea. Use linking words to show how ideas go together.
content
The topic is on hunger and is used in the essay.
structure
Some examples are given, like India and rice cost in Vietnam.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general
Topic Vocabulary:
  • inequality
  • distribution
  • access to resources
  • climate change
  • natural disasters
  • political factors
  • economic factors
  • agricultural practices
  • infrastructure
  • transportation
  • population growth
  • education
  • knowledge
  • food waste
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