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The chart shows the global sales (in billions of dollars) of different kinds of digital games

The chart shows the global sales (in billions of dollars) of different kinds of digital games
The graph illustrates the worldwide sales of different
types
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 of electronic
games
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 over the period from 2000 to 2006. The
types
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 of digital
games
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 are
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 mobile
games
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, online
games
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, console
games
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 and handheld
games
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.
Overall
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, the three
types
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 of sales
games
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 increased by the end of the period, except that console
games
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 declined. Handheld
games
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 display a higher level of use by customers double other candidates. Handheld
games
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 started with the biggest number among other
types
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, in
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 2000, it started with approximately 12
billion
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 dollars and continued to roses significantly to reach nearly double the value when it started , which is 18
billion
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 dollars in 2006.
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, the other
types
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 ,
such
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 as online plays and mobile phone plays, started to
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 by 2002 and
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 started to climb dramatically through the years to reach over six
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 and five
billion
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 for online
games
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 and mobile phone
respectively
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games respectively
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. The console sales plunged considerably from nearly 6
billion
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 in 2000
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 to reach the lowest point which is 3
billion
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 by 2006.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words types, games, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • digital gaming industry
  • billions of dollars
  • global sales
  • game genres
  • market trends
  • consumer preferences
  • technology advancements
  • regional differences
  • industry developments
  • mobile gaming
  • eSports
  • revenue streams
  • massively multiplayer online (MMO)
  • first-person shooter (FPS)
  • role-playing games (RPG)
  • strategy games
  • casual games
  • annual growth rate
  • market share
  • user base
  • in-app purchases
  • subscription model
  • cross-platform play
  • virtual reality (VR)
  • augmented reality (AR)
  • gaming consoles
  • gaming peripherals
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