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The internet has make many things in our lives simpler. However, it has also brought new threats. Do the advantages of using the internet outweigh the disadvantages?

The
internet
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 has become an indispensable tool in our
life
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making
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, making
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 it easier.
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 it has significantly simplified
information
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 search,
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also it has
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it has also
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 impacted
on
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our ability to analyse
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.
This
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 essay will discuss
pros
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the pros
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 and cons of using
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internet
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the internet
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. Beginning with
advantages
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the advantages
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 of the
web
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, it is obvious that access to a wide range of
information
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 has been
avaliable
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available
 to a large number of people. It not only regards news or amusement, but
also
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 scientific articles and educational sources.
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, doctors are able to be aware in terms of modern methods of treatment just
following
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by following
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 some special
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web sites
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websites
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,
instead
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 of visiting expensive courses or conferences. So, people have
got
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the opportunity of self-education through the
internet
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.
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, the
internet
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 has produced
the
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a
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 new kind of issue. Because the
web
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 is a place where anybody can create anything, it can be difficult to keep
high quality
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high-quality
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of
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apply
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information
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 and
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in
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, in
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 addition, to
recognize
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recognise
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 fakes.
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,
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if
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 we consider a similar case in medicine, on the
internet
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, there are
planty
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plenty
 of articles and opinions with no evidence.
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, the
web
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 can be a source of wrong facts
which
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, which
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 can lead to dangerous mistakes in real life. Usage of the
internet
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 has given people an excellent opportunity to learn by themself, but at the same
time
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 has released a lot of specialists whose knowledge is based on wrong
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.
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,
benefits
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the benefits
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 of using digital sources outweigh
downsides
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the downsides
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 because society can manage fakes, but nothing can replace
such
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a usefull
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usefull
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useful
 tool as the
internet
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.

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task achievement
Make sure to clearly address both sides of the advantages and disadvantages in your introduction. This will help set the stage for your essay.
coherence and cohesion
View the essay structure. Ensure you have clear topic sentences for each paragraph to improve logical flow.
coherence and cohesion
It's important to use correct spelling and grammar. For example, 'make' instead of 'has make' and 'available' instead of 'avaliable.'
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Provide more examples to strengthen your points. You only have a few examples, and more could help to make your ideas clearer.
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You presented both sides of the argument, showing an understanding of the topic.
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You have used some specific examples, like doctors using the internet for self-education, which helps to illustrate your points.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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