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Band 4.5

In the future, everybody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

It has been predicted that in the future
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 reading
news
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 and
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books
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books,
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people
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 will use
internet
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the internet
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 and other sources without even spending money; unlike in past when
people
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 used printed newspapers and
books
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. I partially agree with the given statement. My stand is elaborated in
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To begin
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 with, nowadays it is very easy and convenient to carry mobile phones, tablets and other tools
while
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 travelling and even in
day to
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 life. So,
people
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 tend to use these gadgets more than any other papers or
books
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.
Besides
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this
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, by using the internet
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people
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, people
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 can get
news
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 and updates about anything in the world faster.
Moreover
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, there are many interesting tools available in
market
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the market
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;
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,
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 which
makes
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make
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 reading a book enjoyable.
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, many
audible
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audiobook
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books
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 and
news
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 applications make
people
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's lives more comfortable as
people
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 do not have to sit
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in at
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at
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a
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 place holding a book.
On the other hand
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, by using technology
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people
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, people
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 tend to spend more time in front of a screen
and
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, and
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 sometimes they get
headache
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headaches
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 and other health problems.
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, many
people
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 try to avoid screens as much as they can
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, and
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 they prefer reading traditional papers and printed
books
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 only.
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, not all locations have good connectivity for
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the internet
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.
For instance
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,
people
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 who go for a hike or
trekking
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trek
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on
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in
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 a mountain or jungle area
they
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apply
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usually take
books
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 with them if they are readers.
To sum up
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 and offer my position, though modern
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apply
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advancement
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 of technology for
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 and
books
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 are widely being used by
people
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;
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,
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due to
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 connectivity and health care
issues
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issues,
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people
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 will still use papers.

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure your ideas are clearly connected. Use linking words like 'however' or 'furthermore' to show the relationship between sentences.
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Try to give more specific examples to support your points. This will make your arguments stronger and clearer.
coherence and cohesion
Your conclusion should briefly restate your main points to remind the reader of your opinion clearly.
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You present a balanced view by agreeing partially with the statement, which is good for a discussion essay.
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Your points about technology being convenient and health issues related to screen time are relevant and interesting.
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