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Nowadays people waste a lot of food that was bought from shops and restaurants. Why do you think people waste food? What can be done to reduce the amount of food they throw away?

The wasted
food
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 volume has increased dramatically over the past few years. There are many reasons ,
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 as the low price of
food
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 and groceries , and the widespread advertisement leading to consumerism. There are some solutions
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 which could lead people to a more balanced lifestyle. Low-priced
food
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 is a result of overproduction.
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, companies' sole purpose is profit, which pushes them to lower the costs of production through economies of scale.
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 means the higher the production, the lower the costs.
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, the surplus needs to be sold in various ways , and one is
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 advertisement. Having to mitigate their sales targets, companies try to depict overbuying as a natural way of living.
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, a full refrigerator in a two-person household seems normal in TV series and movies. Setting restrictions on production could balance prices. First of all, governments should play a more serious role in legislating new rules, which would encourage companies to decrease the surplus amount of
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 and groceries.
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, new investments in customer awareness through media could remind people of what benefits they could bring to other poor countries by decreasing waste. In conclusion, I believe that cheap
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 and consumerism should be resolved through stricter rules and customer awareness.

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Try to provide a clearer answer to the question in your introduction.
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Make sure each paragraph has a clear main idea that connects back to your overall argument.
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Include more specific examples to support your points about food waste.
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You have a good understanding of the main reasons for food waste.
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Your conclusion is clear and summarizes your main points well.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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