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The plans show the ground floor of the library in 2001 and how it was redeveloped in 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two floor plans compare the ground floor of a library as it was in 2001 with its layout after renovations in 2009.
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, in 2001, there were only three
rooms
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 (History, Self-help, and Fiction), and no modern technology was available. By 2009, the number of
rooms
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 had increased, computers were installed, and a new
area
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 for children was added.
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 with, in 2001, the west
side
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 of the library contained two
rooms
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: Self-help and History. By 2009, the number of
rooms
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 on that
side
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 had doubled, with new sections for Law, Economics, and Cooking. The Fiction
section
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, which was originally located on the north
side
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, was moved to the west, and the
area
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 where it used to be was converted into a children’s book
section
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. On the east
side
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, the
area
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 for newspapers and periodicals was replaced by a film and DVD
section
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 in 2009.
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, several new computers were installed in that
area
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. The southern
section
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 remained unchanged, and everything stayed in its original place,
although
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 stairs were added, presumably to access the upper floor.

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task achievement
Make sure to explain the main changes more clearly, detailing how the layout changed, not just what changed.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words like 'firstly', 'secondly', and 'finally' to improve the flow of your ideas.
coherence and cohesion
The overall structure is clear, with a good introduction and conclusion.
task achievement
You provided specific details about the areas of the library, which shows good observation.

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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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