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The Process of Ethanol Fuel Production from Plants

The figure illustrates the manufacturing process of a type of liquid from a natural source, named ethanol.
Overall
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, the production process of biofuel consists of seven stages that start with the reaction of sunlight and carbon dioxide with the soil, which will stimulate the plants and trees to grow. Eventually, the process ends by distributing ethanol among all types of transportation.
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 the figure shown, the farmers start harvesting the plants by using special equipment
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 as tractors,
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 moving them to heavy machinery for pre-processing, which in turn will produce cellulose ingredients in the shape of slices.
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 later component is
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 transferred to the factory lab to be processed. At
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 stage, sugar is created and combined with microbes to generate ethanol.
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this
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 phase, the liquid is collected in stations to be available for distribution to a wide range of transportation methods.
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, those means will consume the energy to produce carbon dioxide, which will be ready for consumption by plants and trees.
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, the cycle will repeat itself
again
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Task Achievement
Make sure your introduction clearly states the process being described.
Coherence and Cohesion
Include a clearer conclusion summarizing the process.
Coherence and Cohesion
Use more linking words like 'first', 'next', and 'finally' to improve flow.
Task Achievement
The main stages of the process are described well.
Coherence and Cohesion
You explained the cyclical nature of the process effectively.

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