The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.
The line graph demonstrates the proportion of people dwelling in urban areas in four distinct Asian countries between 1970 and
2020
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2020,
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with
projection
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a projection
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over the next 20
years
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.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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the urban population for all countries had
upward
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an upward
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trends
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trend
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.
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while
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Malaysia is expected to have the highest number by 2040, Thailand will
lead to
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have
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the lowest number among others.
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with, the number of
Malaysian
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Malaysians
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who
living
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live
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in cities recorded at 30% in 1970. After an initial fluctuation, it rose significantly
reaching
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, reaching
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approximately 75% in 2020.
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, it is going to witness a gradual climb to about 58% by 2040.
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, the figure for
Indonesian
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Indonesians
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started from almost 12%
from
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in
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1970 and increased sharply to 50% in 2020.
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, it is anticipated to grow notably at 60% by 2040. Turning to
remaining
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the remaining
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regions,
Philippines
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the Philippines
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recorded 31 % in 1970 and over the next 30
years
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it experienced a significant oscillation, reaching 45% in 2020.
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, it will have gone up to 50% over the next 20
years
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. In the same way, Thailand started from around 19% in 1970and observed a sharp rise to 30% in 1990. Over the next 30
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years
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years,
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it stayed stable, and it is projected to increase, reaching nearly 50% by 2040

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Vocabulary: Replace the words years with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • graph
  • percentage
  • population
  • Asian countries
  • living in cities
  • 1970
  • 2020
  • predictions
  • 2030
  • 2040
  • introduction
  • overview
  • trend
  • body paragraph
  • compare
  • predicted percentages
  • summarize
  • closing statement
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