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The chart below shows the movement of people from rural to urban areas in three countries and predictions for future years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the movement of people from rural to urban areas in three countries and predictions for future years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph illustrates the proportion of people relocating from the countryside to metropolitan cities in the three given nations, namely,
Iran
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,
Indonesia
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, and
Russia
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, with the prediction from 2000 to 2025.
Overall
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,
Iran
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 and
Russia
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 experienced constant increases throughout the given period, including the future,
whereas
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Indonesia
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 showed gradual growth for 20 years ,
then
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 will have seen a period of stability for the rest of five years. To start with,
Iran
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 started with less than 10
million
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 people , with the lowest number in 2000. Even though
Iran
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 saw much less change in the number until 2005, its figure increased dramatically from 10
million
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 to 80
million
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 after 2020, when
Iran
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 surpassed
Russia
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.
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, the nation will have kept the top position, reaching a peak of 95
million
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 in 2025.
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,
Russia
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 indicated double that of
Iran
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 at roughly 16
million
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 in 2000. With steady climbs, in 2015, the proportion reached 70
million
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, which was three times that of
Indonesia
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. In 2025, the country will have become the second in all.
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regarding
Indonesia
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, in 2000, the figure was 10
million
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, which was the second position.
However
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,
although
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 there was a gradual climb until 2020, the number of
this
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 country started levelling off. In 2025,
this
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 nation will have remained at 30
million
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 people, resulting in the lowest of all and a third of that of
Iran
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words iran, indonesia, russia, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 2 times.
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