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In many countries, the amount of household waste like food packaging is increasing. What are the causes of this problem? What measures could be taken to reduce it?

In
this
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 modern world, pollution
which
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apply
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caused by the increase of
household
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waste
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such
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, such
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 as food
packaging
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packaging,
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 has affected both society and individuals’ lives. In
this
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 essay, I will discuss
about
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apply
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the causes of
this
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 problem and give some solutions to deal with it. On the one hand, the amount of
household
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waste
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 could be
produce
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reduced
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 by the help of technology development as people would tend to buy their needed things online
which
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, which
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 may increase the number of
plastic
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 bags or boxes used to package.
For example
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, research in Viet Nam has shown that about 70
percent
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per cent
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 of
household
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waste
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came
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comes
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 from online shopping
stuffs
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stuff
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.
Moreover
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,
due to
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 the lack of knowledge, many individuals may not recycle their
waste
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, illustrating that
plastic
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 bags could be reused for a long period
instead
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 of throwing
away
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them away
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,
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. This
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this
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 issue may lead to
the
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a
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 high
rate
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 of
household
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waste
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.
However
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,
government
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the government
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 should release some regulations to reduce the
rate
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 of
household
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waste
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that
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apply
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by
limit
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limiting
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 the
rate
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 of online shopping food,
the
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and the
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number
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amount
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 of
plastic
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waste
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 could be decreased. To illustrate, in Japan, people could
no
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not
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 buy their food online and may be fined if they throw their
household
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waste
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 without dividing
them
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it
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 into different types as
the
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a
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 way to decrease the
rate
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 of
waste
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 released to the environment.
Furthermore
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, schools and social media should raise awareness about
recycle
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recycling
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 and
reuse
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reusing
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the
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apply
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waste
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 since
plastic
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 bottles or bags
and
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, and
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 boxes could be
used for
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reused
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 many times to limit the effects of
household
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waste
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 on the environment. In conclusion, pollution could cause numerous
significantly
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significant
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 effects on the environment
leading
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, leading
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 to many diseases and health problems.
Thus
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, I believe that
government
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the government
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 should approach rules to limit
the
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apply
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household
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waste
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and
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, and
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 individuals should have their own responsibility to recycle and reuse their
waste
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 to contribute
in
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to
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 decreasing the number of
waste
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.

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structure
Your introduction clearly states the problem and what the essay will discuss. Try to make it more engaging and concise.
coherence
In your body paragraphs, ensure each main point has a clear topic sentence to guide the reader. This will help improve the logical flow.
task achievement
Consider adding more specific examples to support your ideas. For instance, mention specific laws or policies that have worked effectively in other countries.
language
Try to use more varied sentence structures and vocabulary to enhance your writing quality. This will make your argument stronger and more interesting to read.
content
Your essay presents a clear problem and solution format, which is effective for understanding the topic.
content
You have included relevant ideas about technology and recycling, which are important factors in this discussion.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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