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Some people discriminate others' hometowns and regions by terms such as Parky or Namkiki. What are causes? What is the solution?

There is no denying the fact that some
people
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descriminate
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discriminate
others'
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against others'
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 hometowns and
regions
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 by other
terms
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.
This
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 essay will discuss the causes of numerous
people
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rename
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 some places and what
is
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apply
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the potential solution
.
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is.
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To begin
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 with, there are many potential causes for numerous
indivdiual
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individuals
discriminate
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to discriminate
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some
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against some
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 hometowns and
regions
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 by
terms
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such
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 as Parky or Namkiki.
Firstly
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, some of
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regions
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the regions
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 and hometowns have long
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name
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names
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, so if
person
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a person
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want
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wants
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 to
describ
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describe
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this
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these
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terms
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 every time will be
diffcult
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difficult
 so
batter is
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better if
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 he
replace
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replaces
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this
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 term be another
is
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that is
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easy
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easier
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.
In addition
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, some new
terms
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 are
destirbution
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distributed
between
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among
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 teenagers
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and use
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use
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used
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 it
between
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among
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 them
only
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apply
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.
For
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example
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example,
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 some of
teenagers
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the teenagers
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 in my city used
word
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the word
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 " mahlaua" to describe
some thing
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something
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is
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as
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 great. In
terms
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 of what is the potential solution for
this
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chaning
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change
 in
name
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, try to
advice
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advise
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 those
people
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beacuse
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because
 maybe in the future will
effect
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affect
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in
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apply
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the real
name
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 of
this
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 region or hometown. It is
also
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 possible to say that we can tell them one of the most significant
that
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things that
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effect
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affect
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in
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apply
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our kids, so in the future our kids will save those
word
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words
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 more than
the
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their
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 real
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name
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names
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.
For instance
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, my child Fasal always
save
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saves
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 the words
i
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I
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spoken
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speak
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not
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, not
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 the words that
i
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I
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 learn him. In conclusion, there are many causes more than
i
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I
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 explain
for
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apply
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for
people
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discriminate
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to discriminate
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some
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against some
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hometows
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homes
 and
regions
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by
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in
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another
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other
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terms
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. It is
also
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 true that
potential
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a potential
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 solution can work if
people
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 change their cognition.

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planning
Plan your answer before you write. Make a small list of causes and a clear plan for the solution.
structure
Try one idea per paragraph. Start with a short intro that says the topic, and finish with a short conclusion.
vocabulary
Use simple words and check spellings. Be careful with words like discriminate, hometown.
examples
Give one or two real life examples from your city or country to show points.
cohesion
Use linking words like and, but, because, so to connect ideas.
content
The topic is clear and there is an effort to discuss causes and the solution.
structure
There is a rough plan to talk about causes and a solution.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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