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Public libraries should provide books and not waste their limited resources on expensive high-tech media sich as software, videos or DVDs. Do you agree or disagree?

Some say that communal
libraries
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 shouldn’t spend their limited funds on technological materials
such
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 as
documentries
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documentaries
, computer programs, artificial intelligence, e-
books
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 and computers and only provide hardcover
books
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.
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, I completely disagree with
this
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 point of view because technological
resources
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 are much easier to store. Another very important reason it is convenient to analyse and find the knowledge in online
resounces
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resources
. First of all,
physical
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the physical
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 capacity of a
library
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 limits the
number
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 of
books
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 it can
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,
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 it is possible to access millions of textbooks with a laptop.
In other words
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,
libraries
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 could provide only a certain
number
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 of copies they have to their members
and
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 there is a limitation of book variety
due to
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the bookshelfs
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bookshelfs
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bookshelves
 of the facility
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; however
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however
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however,
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 if the
library
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 has
the a
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an
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 e-book version unlimited
number
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 of
reader
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readers
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 can access the book at the same time.
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Also
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Also,
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 they could reach more diverse
resources
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 with the help of
web
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the web
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.
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, when I was studying high school
our
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, our
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 school
library
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 allowed students to have three
books
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 at a time
,
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however
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, right now
as
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, as
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 a
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Master's
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student
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student,
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 I can access more than five million
books
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 from my iPad anywhere.
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, new technological advancements transformed how
libraries
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 function, especially in the past three decades. In the past, users relied on printed
cataloges
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catalogues
 and had to ask librarians to locate a book. With the usage of in-house computer systems,
library
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 members were able to do their own search independently
,
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.
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 In the
last
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 decade, online databases have allowed users to identify which
libraries
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 hold a specific title without leaving their homes.
Nowdays
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,
artifical
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artificial
 intelligence tools can analyse vast collections, pinpoint relevant texts, and even highlight the exact pages containing the required information.
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,
Master
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Master's
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 degree students in Türkiye nearly doubled the
number
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 of publications in recent years. In conclusion, some people say that
libraries
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 must buy hardcover
books
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 like they
were
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used to do and shouldn’t invest in high technology
resources
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 like ChatGpt, online platforms and online textbooks.
This
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 essay disagrees with the point of view because
storage
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the storage
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 capacity of
libraries
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 is considerably smaller than computers
and
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, and
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 online
resources
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 are easier to consume for members of
libraries
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.

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task response
Be clear on your view in the first line. Say if you agree or not with a simple sentence.
task response
Give two or three strong reasons with easy to follow proof. Use easy facts or simple examples.
coherence cohesion
Make the plan of your para in the first line of each para. Use topic sentence.
coherence cohesion
Use linking words like First, Also, In addition, But, So to connect ideas. Each idea should be in own paragraph.
task response
The view is clear and there is a conclusion.
coherence cohesion
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