Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that other types of prgress are equally important for a country. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

There is an ongoing debate about the master goal of the
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certain
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much important than the financial area,
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the citizens. On the one hand, some governments are quite convinced that
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successful countries.
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major nations are strong in any area,
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the financial income,
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as the wealthy countries are much stronger compared to
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economic development to the contribution of each sector
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the country and
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it strong to progress in any type.
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, there are a certian things are essensial,
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to the interest finances, we have the health matter states should provides exellent health care to their citizens, because the have the right to access great hospitals, so government should be held accountable for all the human wellfare, and must develop their goals in balance, not only in an econocial factor. To
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, a survey was taken in
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the officials must
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one thing to become a
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country, the majority
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prefer to develop all their sectors in each type. In conclusion, there is no easy answer to
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topic, but on balance,
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both points of
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structure
Make a clear plan. Put intro, then one idea per paragraph, then a short ending.
task response
State your view clearly in the intro or the end so the task is clear.
language
Use simple, correct language. Make short sentences and check key words so spelling is easy to read.
strength
You try to cover both sides and you give your own view.
strength
You use phrases like On the one hand and On the other hand to link ideas.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • economic progress
  • important goal
  • wealth
  • job creation
  • living standards
  • poverty
  • quality of life
  • education
  • health care
  • environment
  • social progress
  • cultural progress
  • equality
  • cultural heritage
  • political stability
  • freedom
  • citizen participation
  • engaged
  • happy society
  • improve
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