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Band 2.5

In many countries people no longer wear their national costumes.They are forgetting their history and treditions.More people should be encoraged to wear their national costumes every day.Do you agree or disagree?

In numerous nations, Traditional clothing has fallen out of regular use,
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 to a gradual loss of cultural heritage and customs
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 It is argued that individuals should be motivated to wear their national attire on a daily basis. Yes i agree, because people should be proud of where they come from, In my humble opinion, it is very marvales to wear cloths to repreasent yourself and your nationalty, like India you can see even on the streets they wear sarry, and if you see an Indian person you will know just by a glance of the way they dressed. And for
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 since I am from
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, I love
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wearing abayas
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I know a lot
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 like to do so
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 love seeing our men
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 I find it so attractive
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 they wear it every day
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especially
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occasions
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 I don't know why some countries
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don't like to
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cherish
 their outfit that
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 to their
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culture
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 reasons in the dark. But
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the
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 should be brave no matter what is the
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reason
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introduce
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 some of the matters
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some
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 clothes are hard to wear
everyday
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Finally
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 is very
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 to wear your traditional custom.

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task response
Make your main idea clear in the first sentence and stay with it.
coherence
Put ideas in order: intro, one or two reasons, short ending.
language
Use short, simple sentences and check spellings.
content
Give one or two clear examples and show how they prove your point.
content
Shows care for tradition and uses real street examples.
task response
The stance is clear.

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