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Demand of food is increasing worlwide. What are the causes of this? What measures can the international community take to make sure the food supply is enough?

There
no
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is no
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 denying the fact that
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demand
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the demand
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of
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for
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food
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 is increasing
worlwide
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worldwide
.
This
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 essay will discuss the
causes
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 of
this
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increasing
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increase
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 and what measures
can
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apply
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the international community
take
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can take
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 to
make sure
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ensure
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 the
food
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 supply is enough.
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 with, there
many
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are many
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causes
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 that can
be
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apply
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lead to
increase
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an increase
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demand
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in demand
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of
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for
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food
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 in the world.
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,
increase
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an increase
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 in the
number
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apply
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of population
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population of
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in
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apply
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the world to about 7,000,000,000
one
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is one
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 of the most significant
causes
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.
In addition
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 lack of
variaty
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variety
 in
food
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means
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more
individiuals
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individuals
 depend on
specific
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a specific
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 type of
a
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apply
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food
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like
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, like
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meet
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meat
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, chicken and bread. In other
word
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words
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, many countries depend on their supply from other
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country
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countries
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. In terms of measures can the international community
take
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can take
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 to make sure about
food
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 supply, try to grow all fruits and vegetables in each
country
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. It is
also
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 possible to say that every
country
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 should be
variaty
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varied
 in
dependce
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dependence
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such
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, such
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 as tomato from
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country
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a country
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 and onion from
other
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another
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country
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, do not depend
in
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on
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 your supply
in
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from
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 only two or three countries.
Moreover
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, if every
country
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try
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tries
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 to supply
thier requirments
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their requirements
the
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, the
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demand
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on
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for
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the
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apply
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food
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 in the world will decrease. In conclusion, there are many
causes
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 of
increasing
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the increase
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of
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in
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food
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demand
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can
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that can
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 be
solve
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solved
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.
it
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It
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 is
also
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 true that every
country
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 can take measures to make sure
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food
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the food
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 supply is enough.

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structure
Group ideas into two clear parts: causes and measures. Start each paragraph with a topic sentence.
grammar
Use simple grammar and fix common errors: There is no denying -> There is no denying that; fix spelling mistakes.
content
Make ideas more specific and with examples, not only general statements.
lexical
Check spelling and word form (worldwide, variety, meat).
cohesion
Use linking words to connect ideas ( firstly, secondly, in addition, however ).
content
The essay tries to answer both parts of the question.
structure
There is an introduction and a conclusion, showing the writer knows the task form.
lexical
Attempts to use simple sentences for clarity.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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