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Writing Samples
Band 1

Еable shows the number of people from five different nationalities living in each other’s countries.

The table illustrates the
amount
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number
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 of individuals who live in each other's country.
Overall
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, the total number of Polish and Italian
people
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 in other states
were
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was
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 dominating ,
while
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 Spanish had the lowest number of them outside the country.
Meanwhile
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Meanwhile,
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 Germany and
Britian
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Britain
 lead in rates of non-native livers,
Poland
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and Poland
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become
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becomes
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 the country with the
least
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fewest
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 of those. Polish
people
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 occupy 4
counrties
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countries
 with
overall
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 1,168,000 , and
Italian
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Italians
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 had 863,670
people
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 in
other's
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other
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 regions.
In contrast
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 ,
British
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the British
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 and German
both
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figures both
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 reached relatively small figures
with
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of
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 above 520,000.Spanish
people
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,
however
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,
become
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became
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 the
last
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 one gaining 202,170 . Germany and
Britan
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Britain
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 appear to be the countries with the
biggers
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biggest
 amount of
imigrants
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immigrants
, reaching over a million
people
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,
while
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 Spain
with
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, with
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a
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apply
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861,000 and Italy
with
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, with
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196,000
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196,000,
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 demonstrated lower results.Poland,at the same time,
respresented
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represented
wildest
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the wildest
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 6,000
non-polish
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non-Polish
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 individuals,significantly differing from other countries.

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task
Overall task: The essay does not fully answer the task. It should show one clear overview and then give the main facts in a logical order. Check that all data from the table is used and correct.
coherence
Structure: Use 3 parts: intro, body, conclusion. Paragraphs should have one idea each and link with simple words like 'also', 'but', 'and'.
grammar
Grammar and word form: many errors with spell and form. Use correct verb forms and plural. Check words such as 'countries', 'people'.
data
Numbers: the figures must be correct and clear. Do not mix up 'in others regions' or 'outside the country'. If you do not know, leave it and not add wrong numbers.
overview
The essay starts with an overview about the data.
data
Some numbers are added, showing the writer does try to use data from the table.
structure
There is an effort to compare groups in the wall of the text.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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