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The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram illustrates the process of manufacturing instant noodles.
Overall
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, the production involves eight stages, beginning with storing flour as the main raw
ingredients
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ingredient
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 and ending with the packing and
labeling
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labelling
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 of the finished product for distribution and selling.
Initially
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, the flour is stored in large silos before
transferred
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being transferred
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 to a mixing machine, where water and oil are added. The mixture is
then
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 rolled into sheets of dough using a roller. These sheets are
subsequently
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 cut into strips.
Next,
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the strips are shaped into individual noodle discs
which
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, which
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 are
then
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 cooked with oil
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then
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and then
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 dried. When the noodle discs are completely dried, they are placed into individual cups. At
this
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stage
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stage,
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 the
flavoring
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flavouring
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 containing the vegetables and spices will be added to each cup.
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, when the cups are
filled-up
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filled up
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,
it
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they
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 will be sealed and
labeled
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labelled
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.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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