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The chart below shows the amount of energy generated from wind in four countries from 1985 to 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the amount of energy generated from wind in four countries from 1985 to 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart depicts how
wind
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energy
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produced
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was produced
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 in four countries, namely
India
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, Denmark, Germany, and the US, between 1985 and 2000.
Overall
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, there was a remarkable increase in all of the nations. Noticeably, the US had the highest
production
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 of
wind
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energy
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 in most of the years,
whereas
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 the figure for
India
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 was the lowest throughout the period. In terms of 1985, the amount of the US’s
wind
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energy
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 accounted for 1200
megawatts
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, which tripled the amount of
wind
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energy
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 generated from Germany. Meanwhile, there were much lower figures in the remaining countries, with around 220
megawatts
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 in Denmark and 200 in
India
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. After 5 years, American
wind
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 power
production
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 reached its peak of 1650
megawatts
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.
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, albeit to a lesser degree, can be seen in the figures for the other three nations, experiencing increases to 650, 450, and 400
megawatts
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, respectively. Regarding the data for
wind
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energy
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 of the US, its
production
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 witnessed a consistently slight decline to 1600
megawatts
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 in 1995, ending at 1500
megawatts
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 in 2000.
In contrast
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,
while
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India
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 and
Denmark
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Denmark
 had equal
production
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 in 1995 at 800
megawatts
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, the former’s level of
production
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 surged significantly to 1200
megawatts
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, and the latter's was 900
megawatts
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 in 2000. For Denmark, its
production
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 saw a sharp increase to 1200 megawatts in 1995, after which it became the largest
wind
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 power producer in 2000, at over 1600
megawatts
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words wind, energy, india, production, megawatts with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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