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Even after the Covid-19 pandemic is over, some companies are thinking of using a hybrid approach when it comes to working from home and on-site. What are the advantages and disadvantages of working on-site?

In recent years, working online has become very popular because of the
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 pandemic.
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 trend brings several advantages, it is
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 associated with a number of drawbacks.
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 essay will explore both sides. Accessibility is the biggest advantage, working from home is more convenient and
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, you can
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work
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, when I was in college I found in much easier to teach the students online rather than going to the university, which can be really helpful in situations like sickness. On top of that, by working online you will save a lot of time and money, what I mean is you will save the cost of the fuel, save the time of getting ready, and
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 can be especially useful for people who live far away from their workplace. Together, these benefits will
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be beneficial for individuals. Despite
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 advantages, there are still
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 drawbacks to consider. Online work
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 perfect as working in the workplace, the performance might be different because of several reasons,
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 as the monitoring, individuals
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 better when
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 like their boss
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 eyes on them. If not, they might not do theirs best,
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 will probably create a problems in the long run if ignore. In conclusion,
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 online work
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 some drawbacks,
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 benefits, including the ability to work any time and anywhere, clearly outweigh the disadvantages.

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task response
Task response: The essay does not answer the ask well. It talks about online work not on site or hybrid work. To score higher, talk about the good and bad things of working on site and give a clear, balanced view.
coherence
Coherence: Link ideas with plain flow. Use simple connect words like also, but, and then. Each paragraph should have one clear idea (one point per paragraph).
style
Language: Use short, clear lines. Fix big grammar mistakes. End with a short closing line that repeats the main idea.
structure
The essay has an opening that says what will be said.
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Some ideas are easy to read.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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