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Writing Samples
Band 5

The diagram below shows how salt is removed from sea water to make it drinkable.

The diagram below shows how salt is removed from sea water to make it drinkable.
The diagram
illustrate
Correct subject-verb agreement
illustrates
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 that the process of drinking
water
Use synonyms
 which made from saltwater.
Firstly
Linking Words
, the saltwater
intaking
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intake
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 from
sea
Correct article usage
the sea
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 would be pretreated by
filter
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a filter
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. After
fliter
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filtering
,
water
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through
Verb problem
is pushed through
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 the membrane
with
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under
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 high pressure. The salt is divided
form
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from
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water
Use synonyms
 when it's processed by the membrane.
There're
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There are
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 some leftovers
Linking Words
such
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, such
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 as filter backwashes and seawater
concerntrate
Correct your spelling
concentrate
 are generated during both
state
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states
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. Leftovers would be returned to sea during processing. In the third stage,
water
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 would be
treatment
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treated
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 with lime,
cloring
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chlorination
 and fluoride.
Finally
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, the saltwater
convert
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is converted
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 to
the
Correct article usage
apply
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drinkable
water
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 after three
states
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stages
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,
then
Linking Words
 the
water
Use synonyms
 is
storaged
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stored
 in the final stage to integrate
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water
Correct article usage
the water
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 supply system.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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