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Band 2

Nowadays, an increasing number of people with health problems are using treatments and medicines instead of visiting Their normal doctor Do you think This is a positive or negative thing

As my
ansectors
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ancestors
 said :
Concealing
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concealing
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 your illness can lead to death.
Who
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Those who
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 feel
a
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apply
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pain
of
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in
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 their own body
they
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apply
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have to visit a
doctor
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. But
,
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apply
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If
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if
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 you have a small injury,
don'
Correct pronoun usage
you don't
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t
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 have to go to the
doctor
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. If you have
the
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a
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seriously
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serious
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 injury, you must go. If everybody cares
of
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about
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 their health,
keep
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keeps
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diet
Correct article usage
a diet
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, doesn'
t
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 eat much sugar and fast food
Linking Words
then
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, then
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 hospitals all over the world will not be
.
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needed.
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 Nowadays,
people
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people,
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 especially
parents haven'
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parentsn't have
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t
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got
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apply
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much time to visit their normal
doctor
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Linking Words
instead
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; instead
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 of they have
got
Verb problem
apply
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pills. Because
,
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apply
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 they have already
used
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got used
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 to
this
Linking Words
even
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, even
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they
Correct word choice
if they
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 have
got
Correct word order
apply
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a chance to go to the
doctor
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. People don'
t
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 care
of
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about
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 their own health, they live only with
thought
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the thought
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 " I have to feed my family ". But their children don'
t
Use synonyms
 want the unhealthy parents
Linking Words
conversely
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; conversely
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, they want to spend their time with their healthy parents to play with their fit father
a
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, a
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football.

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task response
Say what you think at the start of your essay.
task response
Give two clear ideas with a short example for each.
coherence
Use small link words like and, but, so to connect ideas.
structure
Make a plan: intro, two body parts, and a short ending.
grammar
Use short, clear sentences and check capital letters and full stops.
content
Stick to the topic and avoid long lists or stray ideas.
content
The writing shows care for health and for family.
content
There is a good idea about not always many visits to doctors for small issues.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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