Some people think that managers alone should make decisions in the company, while ​others think that employees should be involved in the decision-making process too.​ Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

There has been an ongoing discussion
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about
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whether the managers should solely be responsible for making decisions for a
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, or the
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should participate in
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too. I will discuss both
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views in
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give my view
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the former notion outweighs the latter or not. To commence with, a manager is the first-hand source of information in the
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and
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knows more than others, since he has faced a plethora of challenging situations during the course of his tenure. So definitely, he is the most entitled and knowledgeable one,
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has a vast treasure of experience, which can be used to solve different problems that
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arise in the
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, a manager is directly related to the majority of
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required to make a correct decision.
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, a restaurant manager is aware
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what time of year is
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and how
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staff
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required at that point of time.
On the other hand
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participating in the
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process
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, because they are the
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who are actually working, and can offer practical
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logical solutions to different
problamatic
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problematic
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service department, the employee
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is actually contacting customers
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knows better what
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the
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problems
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people are mostly facing with a product and can look into finding proper answers to
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an open conversation with
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regarding
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difficult situations
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motivates them to think
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enhancing their productivity.
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believe that the
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have access to make most of the
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decisions
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however
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if the
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are included in that as well,
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it increases
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the chances of a good
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decision
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task response
Make your view clear in the intro and keep it clear in the conclusion.
coherence
Use simple sign posts to link ideas: first, next, finally.
grammar
Fix grammar and do not use long, hard sentences.
examples
Give specific examples that match the view you discuss.
content
The essay tries to cover both sides and give a view.
content
It gives a real life example from a restaurant.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general
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