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The table below shows the results of surveys in 2005, 2010 and 2015 about McGill University. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant

The table below shows the results of surveys in 2005, 2010 and 2015 about McGill University. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant
The table illustrates survey results detailing the percentage of pupils providing positive ratings for five various factors of McGill University during the years 2005, 2010, and 2015.
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 interesting feature that the highest rating was maintained by library resources during
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 surpassed by student services
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 least preferred during the initial period surveyed. Another notable data is that
students
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rated range of modules offered by the university during 2005 and 2015. There has been a significant increase in student
sercices
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services
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 rose from 54% in 2005 to 95% by the end reporting period,
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 making it the most
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appreciated
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, library resources had the highest rating of 86% in 2005 and
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maintained
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average
 till 2015 with 87%.
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, the least rated by
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 of modules offered
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 39% positive response in 2005
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 gradually declined to 25% making it the lowest choice by 2015. Another
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 notable data is for the aspect of sports and social facilities
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 over the reporting period of 15 years
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 figure of 65% of positive response from the
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. And teaching quality
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 a rating of 74% in 2005 to 78% by 2015
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 consistent growth.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words students with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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